I'm almost positive none of you know Nabila, because she's new to blogging. She was sent my way by one of my very favorite bloggers, Angela Ackerman, from The Bookshelf Muse, the blog she runs with Rebecca Puglisi. I'm sure you're following Angela and Becca, but if you're not, you need to get on that. Their blog is one of the best online resources for writers, ever. Now, you're probably not following Nabila, but you should be. Her blog, My Own Little Corner, is great! And don't be scared off by the one post in (I think) Arabic, there are posts in English too.
So let's get to her query, remember, if you can, please save your feedback for tomorrow.
The letter:
Dear _____
After a fire burned down her home and her father and brother were lost to piracy, Anna and Shelly Manhar did the only thing they could: become pirates themselves, in order to find their family. But when Anna dies in a mission gone awry, Shelly is left all by herself. Determined to carry on with the plan, Shelly gathers a crew and sets sail, looking for vengeance.
But sailing is never easy for a pirate, and Shelly shockingly finds out that her once lost brother is now a navy officer, ergo making him her enemy. Furthermore, he is working for the very same man who is responsible for Shelly’s predicament. Torn between her desire for revenge and her goal to reunite her loved ones, she learns that what she knew about her family was not entirely true, and her own past is as mysterious as the girl who follows her around everywhere she goes. As her (mis)adventure takes her from one edge of the Caribbean Sea to the other, Shelly finds new friends while trying to stay alive, learns that families come in all shapes and sizes, and understands that hidden treasures are kept hidden for a number of reasons, one of which is so that the world remains safe.
Despite being a student of engineering, writing has always been my passion. THE UNTAMED ONE, completed at 91,112 words, is my first novel. I also have my own blog, named “My Own Little Corner”. If you are interested, I would gladly send you either the first few chapters or the manuscript. Thank you so much for your time and consideration. Looking forward to hearing from you.
That's it.
Please thank Nabila for being brave enough to share, and then save your feedback for tomorrow, which will be awesome, because it's Friday!
19 comments:
Short! I like it already.
I'll be back tomorrow. Welcome to the world of blogging, Nabila.
I've looked at Nabila's blog and for you info, the writing on the current post is not Arabic. It looks like Urdhu or sanskrit. I might be mistaken but definitely not Arabic because I can read Arabic.
Her blog looks great and I think she would be awesome to follow. Thanks for introducing her to us.
cool will be back tomorrow
Thanks Nabila. Pirates? What's not to love? Anxious to see what tomorrow brings.
Hi Nabila!
Hello Nabila. You are in good hands with Matthew. Can't wait to read his comments.
Hi Nabila, This is going to be great! I'll be back tomorrow. (:
ARG, matey! Love it already!!
Thanks everyone! I can't wait for all your feedback!
Hi Nabila! Welcome to blogging. It's a great way to connect to other writers. Can't wait for Matt's critique.
Interesting read. I'll save all else for tomorrow.
Nice premise!
I'll stop back tomorrow. :)
Matthew, were your ears burning. We were just talking about you over on my blog. Are you going to DragonCon?
sounds very interesting!
Congrats Nabila on jumping in the blogging thing, the writing thing, and being brave enough to face the infamous Matthew MacNish! Evan I haven't dared do that. :)
And your story sounds very intriguing!
I love the sound of this. I'll check back tomorrow too.
I love female pirate stories! Good luck!
It's a great concept, Nabila...so glad Matt is able to look at it, because he's the man as far as querying goes. His links on the process are so incredibly helpful, as I'm sure you've seen.
Thanks Matt, and wow, what a shout out! You rock!
Angela
Thanks, Nabila for sharing!!
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