Stephen Tremp's Current Query

Okay. Today I'm helping Stephen Tremp with the query letter he's written for OPENING, the second installment of his Breakthrough trilogy. I hosted Stephen on his original blog tour, the post for which you can find here.

Today is just the query, and my critique will follow tomorrow. Please save your feedback until then as well.

Here's his query:

Chase Manhattan has just been rescued from certain death in Boston. His talented team of California-based comrades, contriving and executing a bold and daring plot, managed to thwart his execution by a group of psychopathic M.I.T. grad students. These gifted zealots are on a mission to stop a new global order of aristocracy by the super-rich egregious elite and instead establish a scientific oligarchy. They will murder anyone who stands in their way, using to their exclusive advantage a stolen technological innovation of future altering eminence—wormholes. Chase and his band have blocked and counterpunched, stymieing the M.I.T. maniacs temporarily; but their problems have just begun. More challenges and a diverse array of new villains await them in the second installment of Stephen Tremp’s action suspense Breakthrough Trilogy—where science meets the supernatural.

As if tampering with wormholes in unchartered spatial realms—a key plot dilemma in Breakthrough—wasn’t enough trouble, in Opening, the naïve use of wormholes unlocks Pandora’s Box, unleashing demonic forces of Biblical, Armageddon magnitude. Chase, and a cast of diabolical villains competing for control of this reality-shaking discovery, are compelled to consider concepts of parallel dimensions—impugning their perception of the universe and humanity’s place in it.

The action and adventure for Chase enters the global stage where the geopolitical scene is almost overnight thrust into what appears to the unsuspecting population to be an inevitable World War III—but it’s much worse than even that. The aggressing China’s leadership has been usurped by a military leader who is now possessed by an archfiend from hell and its army is backed up by a demonic host of death angels on a mission to kill the entire human race. Love, sacrifice, greed, betrayal, and spiritual contemplation define this thriller of science run amok. Chase Manhattan must discover a depth of courage and rely on the strength of his soul mate, Susan Anderson, and the rest of their group if he is to destroy a technology mankind is clearly not ready for.

I have a BSB in Information Systems and an MBA in Global Management, and have worked for some of the world’s largest banking institutions such as General Electric, Deutsche Bank, and E*Trade Bank. This background allows me to weave a particular complexity into this unique thriller. BREAKTHROUGH will appeal to fans of Dean Koontz, Dan Brown, Stephen King, and Douglas Preston and Lincoln Child.

So that's it for today.

Except for this: if you missed Diane's blog post yesterday, you should go have a look. Alex, Talli, and I were talking blogging and comments with Diane, and it turned into a great discussion!