Tuesday, March 27, 2012

Toni Sinns' Current Query II

I've had Toni on before. If you don't recall, here is her other query, and here it is, critiqued. It was a picture book, so of course this one will be somewhat different.

Here's the letter:

Dear Agent,

Anistasia Cloud, an ex-mafia princess, and John Kusagari, a local street racing ring master, become a dynamic duo in the short two months left of their Junior year at Brooksville High. Not only do they have to face the high school drama of being seventeen they also have to face the secretes from their past.

Anistasia is on the run with her older Brother Xander from a mafia her father sold her to when she was only eight. Growing up in the Italian Mafia provided her with an array of special skills she uses to stay one step ahead of her pursuers.

However, when she moves to Brooksville and meets up with John she starts thinking about staying around for a while, which ultimately could be her death.

John is a local boy that took over the underground street races every other Friday night. Using the code name Blaze, as he races, helps keep the law and his mobster father Sebastian out of the know-how. Protecting his Mother April and younger Sister Naomi has been his job ever sense his older brother Hunter died. But when he runs into Anistasia he can’t help but think about her all the time. Is there enough of him to help protect one more?

I GOT YOU COVERED is the first book of the Blazing Charm series. It is completed with 53,768 words. I have available the outline for the complete Blazing Charm series. With your recent move into Juvenile writers I believe my YA, action, romance will be a good fit for you.

I currently have one self-published poetry book on Amazon in paperback and kindle version.

Thank you for your consideration.

Sincerely,

Toni Sinns

That's it!

Please save your feedback for tomorrow. I won't be doing much reading of blogs today, because I need to get some writing done, and it just hasn't been happening at home lately, so if you post something important that you want me to see, please say so in your comment.

14 comments:

Em-Musing said...

This is an exciting story. I'll check back tomorrow to see your comments.

Joshua said...

Interesting. Hmm...

DL Hammons said...

With a few nip and tucks, I believe this could be an effective letter. Interesting premise.

SA Larsenッ said...

Anything with the mafia is hot. It should prove interesting to see what others say tomorrow. :D

farawayeyes said...

Hi Toni, interesting premise, something different.

mshatch said...

will definitely be back to see what everyone has to say about making this query shine - especially the master of polishing :)

Talli Roland said...

Interesting concept! I'll try to remember to pop by tomorrow and add my comments.

Gracielou said...

Just a heads up for everyone the point of view in the book switches from John to Anistasia a couple of times. So that is why I tried to put in both main characters in the query.


Anyway not sure if that is important to your comments tomorrow or not but Thank you again so much Matthew for hosting my query and all your wonderful help from you and your followers.

Alex J. Cavanaugh said...

Hey Toni! Will be back tomorrow.

Sarah Ahiers said...

I'll be back!

Christina Lee said...

Strong name!!! *waves*

Donna K. Weaver said...

Wow. Lots of tension built into this one.

Gina Gao said...

There's a lot of tension in this one.
Good post.


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Rusty Webb said...

I look forward to this...