Tuesday, September 7, 2010

Emily White

This morning I would like to introduce you all to my buddy Emily White, from Stepping into Fantasy. Emily didn't win any contests but she did ask very nicely if I would help her with her query. So I am going to. This week.

Before we get to that I would like to make a couple quick announcements:

Thanks to Karen G from Coming Down the Mountain for hosting the simple but fun BBQ blogfest. I met tons of new bloggers and even gained at least ten new followers. Thanks Karen, welcome BBQers!

My friend Sheri Larsen from Writer's Alley is hosting an I Got U blogfest. Check it out!

My friend and writing mentor Bryan Russell needs your help. Please visit his blog The Alchemy of Writing for details but essentially he needs sponsors for the Terry Fox Run he will be partaking of on September 19th. It's a 10k run for a good cause so please visit his blog for more info.

Now on to Emily's query. Emily would like to thank everyone who lent a hand during WriteOnCon, especially all the awesome hosts. She knows her query needs some work, but she's got an awesome idea for a tale so I think it will be worth our while to lend a hand.

Today is just for introductions and to get an idea of her query. Please don't give any feedback until tomorrow, after I've shared my own, so that I can seem cool and wise.

Now! To the query:


Dear Super Agent:

(Personal stuff)

Ella didn’t think her problems were going to get worse after escaping an interstellar prison ship, and she certainly didn’t think she’d be expected to save the galaxy.

Her feet barely touch solid ground before the prison ship guards notice Ella’s missing and chase her all the way into the middle of a giant bug infested desert—giant bugs who just happen to have a taste for meat. With sharp-edged pincers ripping away at her flesh, an ability Ella never knew she had is awakened. Anybody order crispy critters? With fire now at her tenuous disposal, Ella hops aboard a freighter on its way to a planet well outside her captors’ territory.

Making friends is something she hoped she’d do, but these friends have some bad news: she’s part of some alien race everyone thought was a myth. And more specifically, she’s destined to fight a fallen angel with a god complex, or die trying.

Problem is, years of solitary confinement didn’t really prepare Ella for fighting—or walking—or any semblance of balance on two feet for that matter. Honestly, she doesn’t even know if she wants to fight him. In a perfect world, Ella would be left alone. But here’s the thing: this god’s not exactly sitting around waiting for her to make up her mind. If Ella doesn’t hurry up and decide what’s really important—a life with her friends or a galaxy where living is actually possible—she won’t be the only one to end up dead.

ELEMENTAL, a 65,000 word YA Science Fiction set in a galaxy in desperate need of change, is rife with teleporting fairies, interstellar battleships, and things that go boom.

Thank you for your time and consideration.

Sincerely,

Emily White

Questions? Comments? Meeting Emily for the first time? Go ahead say hello! Just remember to save your feedback for tomorrow and don't forget to visit her blog and become a follower.

24 comments:

Jessica Carmen Bell said...

Is this her original version? It's great! I want to read the book and I hate sci-fi!

aspiring_x said...

emily is sweeter than a spoonful of sugar! :)
thanks for helping her with her query!

Alex J. Cavanaugh said...

Saying hello to Emily! And I do like science fiction.

Emily White said...

Don't worry, Matthew, you are very cool and wise.

Thanks again for doing this!

Creepy Query Girl said...

Hi Emily! This sounds so original! I think together you and Matt could really make this sparkle. Thanks for sharing with us and I'll be back to check in tomorrow!

Stina Lindenblatt said...

You're always cool and wise, Matt. Can't wait to see your comments. This sounds like a great book.

Bish Denham said...

It's brave of you Emily to share this with us. Very interesting concept!

Bish Denham said...

It's brave of you Emily to share this with us. Very interesting concept!

Joanne Brothwell said...

I'm not usually a fan of Sci-Fi, but this sounds great!

Old Kitty said...

Hello Emily!! I'm a complete amateur so I know zilch but I do like the first para of your story best in this query - it really got me going - "oooh this sounds good"!

Good luck with this, take care
x

Dayana Stockdale said...

I love the style of the writing and sense of character that we get. I got a little lost early on because I thought there was too much description given to the bugs. then I realized that the bug scene lead to her discovering her ability, but still it tripped me up. Maybe too descriptive there? Not sure...

Jared Larson said...

Hey Emily,your book sounds like tons of fun. Matt, I read your comment on Elana's blog about being selfless when blogging. Great advice. That seems to be the answer for a lot of things. Thanks for the reminder.

Justine Dell said...

First off--this is way cool, Emily.

Second, Matt--have I been gone soooo long that I missed a new blog thing you do? This is really cool helping queriers! We all know how painful and annoying they are, so offering up a bit of advice is awesome of you! ;-)

~JD

Lindsay (a.k.a Isabella) said...

Yay for Emily. I'm a follower of already.

The book sounds so original. Can't wait to see how this baby sparkles after the qqqe treatment. :)

C.E. said...

Thanks for the follow! Glad you found me. Your blog looks like it will be very helpful and handy.

And Emily's book sounds so interesting! Can't wait to see what you have to say about the query.

Christina Lee said...

Okay I'll save my comments (it's hard b/c I like the premise), but welcome Emily!!!!

Kelly said...

Welcome, Emily!
I like simple, cool one word titles like hers.

Falen (Sarah) said...

Yay! Sci-fi FTW!
I'm looking forward to the discussion tomorrow

Candyland said...

HEEELLOOOOO EMILY!!! (and Timmy)

Slamdunk said...

Welcome Emily!

Brenda Drake said...

I'm already a follower of both yours and Emily's blogs. Love the premise and can't wait to see what you do with the query. :D

Lori W. said...

Hi Emily! Thanks for sharing your query. So hard to save comments for later. I'm a fan of sci-fi, too.

Lisa and Laura said...

Ooh, ooh--what a query! Can't wait to see your take on it Matt!

Jemi Fraser said...

Hi Emily! Can't wait to see what you and Matt cook up - you've got a great sounding story here :)