Thursday, January 17, 2013

Misha Gericke's Current Query

Today we have Misha, from My First Book and Taking Charge of my Life, and a revision of her query letter. As that last link shows, I've had this query on before, so let's just get right to it.

The query:

Dear [Agent],

Sixteen-year-old Callan Blair has been in the British foster care system for five years. She should be equipped for just about anything. Turns out… not.

On day one at her new school, a lethal knight (more like arrogant bastard) drags her through a doorway into Tardith, a continent in a different world. One where dragons still steal sheep and where her grandfather is the elvish king. Callan is his only granddaughter, so everyone counts on her to save their country from a devastating war.

The idea of having a real family and friends is a dream come true. Marrying a sadistic man with genocide on the mind in order to protect them… Not so much. But if she doesn't go through with the wedding, everyone dies. If she does, she'll be tortured for the rest of her very short life. So much for the happy homecoming.

Callan's choice doesn't get any easier when she realizes her only hope for survival lies with the same asshole who put her in Tardith in the first place.

Equipped for anything. What was she thinking?

That's it.

Please thank Misha for sharing, and save your feedback for tomorrow!

12 comments:

Misha Gericke said...

Thanks for hosting me again, Matt!

Em-Musing said...

Excited to see you on Matt's blog with your query. Love the story.

Alex J. Cavanaugh said...

Misha rocks! Look forward to tomorrow and your thoughts.

Pat Hatt said...

Seems like a straight forward and great query, be interesting to see your review.

Nancy Thompson said...

Can't wait to hear what Matt has to say. I'll be back.

Dianne K. Salerni said...

This is way different from Misha's last approach to the query, and greatly improved. I look forward to seeing Matt's critique.

Laura Stephenson said...

I'll come back tomorrow with some comments!

Michael Offutt, Speculative Fiction Author said...

Good luck with your query, Misha. I'll send Matthew my critique via email cause this has been up before.

Bethany Elizabeth said...

I'll be back tomorrow, can't wait to see the critique! :D

Bethany Elizabeth said...

I'll be back tomorrow, can't wait to see the critique! :D

mshatch said...

Looking forward to see what everyone has to say.

DL Hammons said...

Misha put her query through some pretty dramatic changes. I'll be back tomorrow to see what you think of them! :)