Tuesday, October 4, 2011

Marcy Hatch's Current Query

More queries. It's what we do here. Today is a letter from Marcy S. Hatch. You know what to do. If you're like me, you know Marcy from her blogs, Mainewords, or perhaps, Unicorn Bell. Before we move on, please go visit and follow at least one of her blogs.

Now. Just in case any of you are new and haven't seen this done before, please remember that today is just for introducing Marcy and her query letter. Please save your feedback for tomorrow, after I have given mine.

So. To the query:

Dear [insert agent's name properly spelled]:

It is the winter of 1805 and the only thing sixteen year old Arlen Devlin thinking of is the ball that will introduce her to high society and that elegant madness known as The Season. But when tragedy strikes Arlen's life takes a decidedly witchy turn, beginning with the discovery of a grandmother she never knew to a book of spells that has been handed down from mother to daughter. This, however, isn’t just any book of spells. This is a family’s heritage, a compilation of every scrap of magick gathered over the course of history. It’s the family’s grimoire. And someone wants hers.

Soon Arlen learns that the tragedy that took her parents’ lives may not have been an accident and hers isn’t the only heirloom book of spells. Each of the great witch families has one and whoever holds the book holds the power in this England, where magick has as much influence as money, where witches are courted, and spells are traded for favors. It will take every talent Arlen has – including her mastery of the imp, Vathek - to navigate this maze of conspiracy and intrigue, and maybe, if she’s very lucky and very careful and very clever, she’ll survive.

Grimoire is complete at 93,000 words and set during the Regency period in England – albeit a slightly different England. I have a BA in History and I've written several other books. I have pasted the first five pages per your guidelines. If you would like to see more, I would love to send it to you.

Thank you for your time,

Marcy S. Hatch

That's it for the letter.

Please say hello to Marcy in the comments, thank her for having the courage to share this publicly, and then have a nice day!

26 comments:

Jessica Bell said...

Hello Marcy! Your query is in excellent hands! :o)

Dianne K. Salerni said...

Hi, Marcy! *waving* I've seen this query of course, even had my hand in it a bit. Can't wait to see what magick (ha!) Matt works on it!

Natalie Aguirre said...

Hi Marcy. Thanks for sharing your query. I loved the magic aspect of your story. Will save the rest for when Matt queries it.

Bish Denham said...

What an interesting concept. A nice refreshing twist on an old theme.

Suzie F. said...

Hello Marcy! Looking forward to tomorrow's critique.

Bryan Russell said...

Interesting!

salarsenッ said...

Hey, Marcy! Love this like everything else you write. Looking forward to comments tomorrow!!

Old Kitty said...

Yay for magick in England!! Take care
x

Kelly Polark said...

Thanks for sharing, Marcy!
Well done, but Matthew and his peeps will perfect this thang!

Slamdunk said...

I am looking forward to it Marcy and Matthew. I enjoy fiction with a 19th century backdrop.

Joshua said...

Me likey witches. See you tomorrow.

Michael G-G said...

It's already in pretty good shape, methinks, but I'm sure the Query King will finetune it with his magick!

Michael Offutt said...

Hello Marcy. It is nice meeting you!

Bethany Elizabeth said...

Hey Marcy! It sounds like a great story!

mshatch said...

thanks everyone :) and esp. Matt for doing this.

Donna K. Weaver said...

Greetings Marcy. You are a brave soul. I'm in the middle of working through my first query and it's HARD!

Alex J. Cavanaugh said...

Hey Marcy! Don't worry - Matthew does a great job with query letters.

Sub-Radar-Mike said...

Marcy, you've come to the right place!

Carrie said...

Hi Marcy. Thanks for posting your query. Sounds like a cool story.

Jemi Fraser said...

Sounds like you've got a great story, Marcy. I look forward to seeing Matt's suggestions for the query! :)

Sarah Ahiers (Falen) said...

i shall try and be back tomorrow. If not, i will def be back on thursday

Kristen Pelfrey Faulconer said...

Marcy, I salute your courage and your story. I love that word "grimoire"--think of the paper such a thing would be printed/etched/bled on. Deckeled edges.
Sounds awesome!
Thank you for letting complete greenies like me see the process!!!

Anita said...

Great courage, Marcy! You're gonna rock this experiment!

Rusty Webb said...

Intriguing premise Marcy. Looking forward to seeing the critique.

Arlee Bird said...

Hello Marcy and the query looks pretty good to me. I had to look up "grimoire"--seems like a pretty obscure word. That title might cause some head scratching.


Lee
Tossing It Out

Enid Wilson said...

Congratulations Macy! It's an interesting story and your query is great. If I was to make any suggestion, I would point out your point of difference: Is there other Regency witchy books available? Is this target for YA or romance readers? And how successful are your previous books? Good luck!

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