I think this was one of those agency websites that asked me to fill out a web form rather than send in an email query. As you can see it completely screwed up my formatting. I would fix it but I'm too lazy and it makes a certain point.
The point being that now it looks like word vomit. Art (or lack thereof) imitating life, or was that the other way around?
> I am writing to
> you seeking representation for my young-adult
> fantasy-adventure/commercial fiction crossover novel
> which has the working title, Warrior-Monks, and is complete
> at approximately 475,000 words.
> The sequel, which is untitled, currently exists only
> in outline form. I am including
> a synopsis as well as the first ten pages of the book
> because that is specifically what The REDACTED Literary
> Agency website asks for.
> I love Eastern
> Cultures and the many art forms they incorporate such as
> – Martial Arts, Calligraphy, Japanese Swords, and the
> Tea Ceremony as well as all the traditions and high level of
> art that go into them. I also
> love Magic and Fantasy and Eastern Religions such as
> Buddhism, Hinduism, and Taoism.
> Warrior-Monks incorporates all of these themes in a
> fantastic way which has never been done in young adult
> fantasy to my knowledge.
> I have never been
> published but I am confident that many authors like
> Christopher Paolini and Brunonia Barry have proved that you
> do not have to be a highly experienced or best-selling
> author to write an incredibly entertaining book. I also do have some personal
> qualifications to write this story.
> For example my own mother died when I was eleven
> years old and I was then sent to live with a cruel aunt and
> uncle and eventually did end up at a reform school in
> Northern Idaho which although strange, was not nearly as
> fascinating as the place in which my characters find
> themselves within this book.
> Please feel free
> to reply to this email, or to call me on my mobile phone at
> any time at 206-555-1212, or even to write to me at
> home at:
> Thank you for your
> consideration of this proposal. I look forward to hearing
> from you soon.
> Matthew M.
Okay, so this query is a little better than some in the past. At least it's shorter. At this level of quality shorter is certainly better.
Thank you very much for your query, which I have read with interest. Unfortunately the project does not seem right for me, and I am sorry I cannot offer to read your work.
I do wish you all the best on finding more suitable representation, and thank you again.
For some reason her reply came through with normal formatting. Only my clumsy query got the funky carat lines and indentations. Kind of fitting if you ask me.
Can I just say I hate those web form queries? I'm sure they work great for the agents and probably save them time and effort and of course if it lands someone representation that's great, but I don't like them. They're awkward and difficult to keep track of when you're trying to remember who you've queried and when, or if, you should expect to hear back from them.
This rejection was form but polite, and nothing more or less than should have been expected.