Okay, finally getting back to business, here is Summer's current query.
The letter:
Dear Agent,
A steak knife, an old ring, and a crime punishable by death all have one woman in common- Ebony Graves. At twenty-two years old, she lives in a patriarchal society that hangs women first, asks questions later. No one cares that she was trying to escape a vicious beating by her own father.
With no other options available, Ebony requests sanctuary from the only powerful woman in town, Lady Charmaine. Her benefactor demands she become the next Jade courtesan by competing in three challenges to save herself. In doing so, it awakens a rune magic from inside that Ebony didn’t know she had, as well as a desire for Kaige, the handsome stranger lurking throughout the manor.
Pitted against contestants who plot her downfall and a new magic power that threatens her body and soul, Ebony must decide if she can follow through with Lady Charmaine's demands or if her price of freedom lies in death.
I am submitting BLOODSTONE for your consideration. It is a romantic fantasy novel. It stands complete at approximately 52,660 words and is set up for a series.
My published works have been accepted by everydaypoets.com, fiction365.com, Pill Hill Press, and my local college’s Expression Magazine. I recently graduated with my BA in English from the University of Wyoming.
Thank you for your time,
Summer Ross
That's it.
Please save your feedback for tomorrow, and thank Summer for sharing in the comments.
10 comments:
Ooo. This is a great starting query! I look forward to Matt's notes:)
Thanks for sharing your query, Summer.
Thank you Matt- for having me and helping. I think it's wonderful what you do for others.
I look forward to what everyone has to say.
~Summer
I know Summer!
Hi Summer, nice to meet you. I'll be back tomorrow.
Hey Matt - While I was partial to that last picture, I do like this one(over there at the right). You kinda look like the King of Something.
Great start to the query, Summer. Can't wait to read how you work your query magic, Matt :-)
I think it sounds great. I would probably add a little something at the beginning to address the agent/editor and why I chose them. But that may just be me. Seems polite to say hi, this is why I want you opener.
I'll be back tomorrow to see what Matt has to say :)
Yeah Summer! Exciting to see Bloodstone up here. I'll be back tomorrow. (:
I'm already formulating what I'd say about it. I'm sure Matt's analysis will be amazing!
I'll be back tomorrow.
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