Thursday, September 20, 2012

Patricia Moussatche's Current Query

Happy Thursday, readers. Today we have Patricia Moussatche, AKA Patchi, from My Middle Years. Or, well, at least we have her query. She doesn't seem to have GFC installed, but you can follow her posts via RSS, if you like.

Now, her query:

Dear [Agent Name],

Top graduates ever from the Academy of Demia, David and Catrine were more than friends and schoolmates -- they were a team. At least until the day he kissed her.

That was the day David noticed the tiny tattoo hidden in her hair. He recognized the symbol from a book that implied a single family had been ruling Demia since colonization. But David had never believed the book before -- it contradicted the core principles on which the planet was founded. Demia was the center of knowledge in the galaxy. It was supposed to value merit, not birthright. Everyone knew the last two headmasters were from the same bloodline -- but all of them? No wonder the history books have disappeared!

Now David is certain Catrine is next in line for a hereditary throne that should not even exist on their academic planet. Will his own accomplishments count for naught when the next ruler is chosen? And how can he love her if she represents the hypocrisy of the utopian society he has always believed in?

When David discovers his parents are conspiring to make him king of Demia -- a position that does not exist -- by marrying him to Catrine, he is sure his leadership skills can be better employed bringing peace to the turmoil at the other end of the galaxy. He does not want to be part of a deceitful government, but can Demia prosper without him? And how long can he evade those who are determined to lure him home? The bait might just be more than he can resist.

THE LEGACY OF THE EYE, complete at 85,000 words, is social science fiction and was inspired by Plato’s Republic. I also work with science fiction in test tubes at [the cool place I work].

Thank you for your time and consideration.

That's it.

Please thank Patricia for sharing in the comments, and save your feedback for tomorrow. Thanks!

11 comments:

Sarah said...

Fascinating query! I'll return tomorrow with feedback.

Dianne K. Salerni said...

Interesting premise! I'll be back tomorrow.

Natalie Aguirre said...

Interesting story. Thanks for sharing it Patchi.

Alex J. Cavanaugh said...

Looking forward to your thoughts on it, Matthew.

farawayeyes said...

Anxious to see what Matthew had to say. Thanks for sharing Patricia.

Patchi said...

Thanks for posting this Matthew and I'm looking forward to your (and everyone's) critique.

By the way, I added the missing GFC to my blog :)

SA Larsenッ said...

I think you did a great job, especially in the first paragraph. Awesome premise! Looking forward to Matt's feedback.

Libby said...

Thanks for sharing! Will come back tomorrow to see everyone's feedback.

Carolyn V said...

Wow, that was great. I'll be back tomorrow. ;)

Joshua said...

I thought this story was going to go a different way. Hmm...

Bryan Russell said...

Interesting.