Tuesday, September 16, 2014

DL Hammons' Current Query

Everybody knows DL, right? Host of the Write Club? If not, make sure you go follow his blog.

Here's his query:

Agent Name
Agency Name

Agent personal paragraph.

The word on a sixteen-year-old Knox Gidden is that he's nothing but military-brat, emphasis on brat. Until recently he was fine with that. He's lost count of how many times his family has relocated (not really) and it's left him withdrawn, bitter, a loner with a tendency to act out by playing nasty tricks on moving day. But after his mother died of cancer and a tragic prank-gone-wrong that put his brother in a wheelchair, a guilt-ridden Knox wants to clean up his act. The family's transfer to Ox-Bow, deemed their "final move", is supposed to be a fresh-start for everyone. Unbeknownst to them, something else has moved in with them.

After all the empty cartons have been dragged to the curb, one more box mysteriously appears. It's a dark, ominous box with curious etchings covering its surface. Of course all fingers point to Knox, which only gets worse when the box keeps showing up in his room. It's not long before Knox realizes he's on a collision course with something unnatural, an ancient evil that has chosen his step-mother at its next vessel to toy with. His only allies in this battle are Lewis, a kleptomaniac neighbor, Brodie, the beautiful girl who watches over Lewis, and Wilfred, a white-haired stranger who shows up claiming to know everything about the box and its purpose.

Time is short for Knox and his friends. Can they find a way to save his step-mom before the malevolent force draws closer to ending the game and obtaining the two things it desires the most -- mortal fear, and fresh souls? Unfortunately, history says otherwise.

MOVING FEAR (an 80,000 word YA Horror) is a standalone with series potential which combines the type of haunting plot of Kendare Blake's Anna Dressed in Blood with the creepy atmosphere of Gretchen McNeil's Possess. In my day job, I write procedure manuals, but when the sun goes down, I maintain a popular blog that hosts a yearly writing contest judged by industry professionals.

Thank you for your time and consideration.

DL Hammons

That's it!

Please thank DL for sharing, but like me, save your feedback for tomorrow!


Alex J. Cavanaugh said...

Hey, it's DL!!

DL Hammons said...

Yikes!!! I think for the next 24-36 hours my sphincter will be the size of a BB!!

mshatch said...

Cool! I'll be back tomorrow to see what our query guru has to say :)

Heather M. Gardner said...

I'm so glad to see you took this next step!

My fingers are crossed for you!


Dianne K. Salerni said...

I've seen earlier versions of this, and I really like the changes I see here. Can't wait for Matt to work his magic on it next!

Deniz Bevan said...

Such a neat idea! Looking forward to tomorrow's critique.