Thursday, May 9, 2013

Hannah Kincade's Current Query

Hunkering right back down to business here at the QQQE, we'll have queries for the next couple weeks. Incidentally, if you're new here, because of A to Z, or otherwise, please be advised that I both Analyze Successful Queries, and Critique Queries that are close, but might need a little work. If you're interested in submitting a query for either of those series, please email me at mattmrush(at)gmail(dot)com.

Now, if you don't know Hannah Kincade, you're really missing out. You can find her horror writer blog at The Write Mood. Please make sure you drop by to follow her.

Back? Here's her query:

Dear :

Being a fellow fan of anything horror, I think you’ll really enjoy my supernatural, YA horror.

When seventeen-year-old Zachariah Malone faces an obstacle he can’t take out with his fists, he must find out if he’s battling an evil entity or if he belongs in a straight-jacket.

After years of being bullied, Zach finally learns how to defend himself. When Zach is caught fighting on school grounds (again), he makes a deal with the school counselor: stop his confrontations and attend an advanced art class instead of risking suspension. The problem is, he doesn’t do art. But he’ll try anything that puts him in close proximity to Jennifer Drake and, most importantly, distract him from the voice in his head.

Because the voice in his head has a name: Alice. She feeds his isolating thoughts with others’ secrets, as if he needed one more thing to make him an outsider. And not even Zach’s growing relationship with Jen is enough to distract him from the idea that he’s saying goodbye to his sanity. When he learns there might be a connection between Alice and a series of disappearances, he starts to wonder if maybe Alice is more than just his mind steering him towards a padded cell.

When Zach wakes with blood on his hands, he races to discover the truth. Soon the police begin to suspect him in the disappearances, and Zach must decide if he’ll fight to prove his innocence, or run from a crime Alice is beginning to convince him he committed.

TO FACE BENEATH is a dark, psychological YA Horror complete at 60,000 words. It would appeal to fans of Christopher Pike and The Marbury Lens by Andrew Smith.

Thank you for your time and consideration.

Sincerely,

Hannah Kincade
email.address@email.com
(***)***-****
www.thewritemood.blogspot.com
@HannahKincade

That's it!

Please thank Hannah for having the courage to share this with us in the comments, and save your feedback for tomorrow.

20 comments:

Dianne K. Salerni said...

Hello, Hannah! Nice to meet you, and I'll be back tomorrow!

Alex J. Cavanaugh said...

Hannah rocks!!
This one has the creep factor going for it.

Sarah said...

Followed! I'll definitely try to sneak back tomorrow with some feedback!

vic caswell said...

awyeah hannah! :D

Christina Lee said...

Oooooh horror!! Hi Hannah!

Hannah Kincade said...

Hello, Diane. Nice to meet you as well.

Hannah Kincade said...

Aw, thanks, Alex!

Hannah Kincade said...

Thanks for the follow, Sarah!

Hannah Kincade said...

Helllloooo, Vic!

Hannah Kincade said...
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Hannah Kincade said...

Hello Christina!

Hannah Kincade said...

Thank you for putting this up, Matt!! You're a rock star!

Jay Noel said...

Whoa. That story sounds pretty creepy. This is a really good query. I'm interested in what people think and how it can be made great.

Sarah Ahiers said...

I've seen this awesome query before, but i'll be back with comments tomorrow!

farawayeyes said...

Hi Hanna,nice to meet you. I'll be back.

Katy Upperman said...

Ooh, this is so deliciously creepy! I'd definitely buy the book based on this summary, so I'll be interested to see what your thoughts on the query are, Matt. Great job, Hannah!

mshatch said...

Interesting! I'll be back tomorrow :)

Hannah Kincade said...

I can't wait to see what you guys have for me tomorrow!!

Sheena-kay Graham said...

Congrats Hannah for sharing and best of luck with querying.

Emily White said...

Yay for Hannah!! I can't wait to see what you have to say, Matt. :)