Colene Murphy's Current Query

You guys know the drill by now, right? This is just Colene's query, sort of a chance for you to read it, and let the concept marinate in your grey matter for a while.

Tomorrow will be for feedback, so please wait until then to tear Colene a new one. Just kidding.

Oh, by the way, if you don't know Colene, go visit her blog, and follow it.

Dear Agent,

17-year-old Faith just wants to get out of the decrepit orphanage, forget no one wanted her, and be left alone with her boyfriend. The pregnancy is a glitch, but she can figure that out later.

But Mrs. Simp, the director, is acting weird – homicidal weird.

To escape death at the hand of the once trusted employee, Faith flees through an ivy covered stone wall and runs straight into another world.

There, a beautiful, strange woman named Uri is waiting. She promises a happy ending for Faith, her baby, and the boyfriend. They can all come and live in paradise forever on one condition: Faith must follow the haunting woman deeper into the world behind the wall. It didn’t seem like much of a condition until you add in the flesh eating lake monster, city of faceless human replicas, and scorpions falling from treetops.

As the adventure gets even freakier, Faith wants to go back. And Uri turns violent. In a rage, she burns an entire city and its inhabitants using only her will and demands possession of Faith’s unborn child in return for safe passage 'home'.

Faith must decide: give up the baby she didn't think she wanted in the first place to save her own life, or take up the machete and fight the all powerful, demented Uri for more than just her freedom.

INTO ADELLADARE is a 49,000 word fantasy horror novel for young adults.

This is going to be a tough one, because IMHO this is very close. I will try to give Colene what feedback I can tomorrow.

Thanks!