tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post8035602419474513809..comments2023-11-06T13:07:23.645-05:00Comments on The Quintessentially Questionable Query Experiment: AIR PIRATES by Adam HeineMatthew MacNishhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03264738483763244969noreply@blogger.comBlogger52125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-42143414221117442192012-01-10T17:36:50.511-05:002012-01-10T17:36:50.511-05:00Wow, this was days ago! How did I miss Adam's...Wow, this was days ago! How did I miss Adam's query? I've been waiting and waiting! But the wait was worth it. Smashing query, and an insightful critique on how it worked. Thank you both!Nancy Thompsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05735642863696266005noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-34133907324342006342012-01-08T23:34:35.960-05:002012-01-08T23:34:35.960-05:00Congrats, Adam! Love learning from success.Congrats, Adam! Love learning from success.Chris Phillipshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02638226375639228988noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-46117598850127715952012-01-08T19:19:23.870-05:002012-01-08T19:19:23.870-05:00very, very cool. This sounds like an awesome story...very, very cool. This sounds like an awesome story and great job by both parties showing how and why the query worked. Even better is that we will all soon get the opportunity to read the story :)mshatchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06308916014310536449noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-41489448132408978382012-01-08T16:49:40.302-05:002012-01-08T16:49:40.302-05:00That was SO well done--by both of you. I don't...That was SO well done--by both of you. I don't usually like long posts (because I typically get interrrupted by my kids and lose my train of thought), but this was worth it! I can see why Adam landed an agent. Congrats to him.Susan Oloierhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07311938400999953443noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-67514673009657073132012-01-08T01:26:22.421-05:002012-01-08T01:26:22.421-05:00We love double posts! Glad to read what you've...We love double posts! Glad to read what you've got on your mind. :)BragonDornhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13327193036434280792noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-643949680863069132012-01-07T14:50:48.617-05:002012-01-07T14:50:48.617-05:00Congratulations, Adam! Thanks to both of you for ...Congratulations, Adam! Thanks to both of you for this post. The query letter and both sets of comments was very helpful and clear. Pointing out the stakes and the choice, how the character chose to deal with the stakes helped me to pinpoint problems in my query. Christyerica and christyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13074820593371226159noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-47909832816176828012012-01-07T13:55:59.195-05:002012-01-07T13:55:59.195-05:00Thanks Matt and Adam for sharing this query letter...Thanks Matt and Adam for sharing this query letter. Good luck, Adam, with Air Pirates! I like the premise, and the plot.<br /><br />Anytime there is a mother-child link, the ante is upped for the success of the book, IMO.D.G. Hudsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06213237734772028645noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-24665204923536155872012-01-07T12:01:18.187-05:002012-01-07T12:01:18.187-05:00Congrats to Adam. I hope his first agent is infini...Congrats to Adam. I hope his first agent is infinitely more productive than mine was. His book sounds groovy and I wish him all the luck in the world. Cheers!A Beer for the Showerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17029139745335325356noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-51038257421875420872012-01-07T08:51:34.339-05:002012-01-07T08:51:34.339-05:00Great query. It's really helpful to see ones t...Great query. It's really helpful to see ones that have worked and why. Thanks for a great series.Natalie Aguirrehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03756087804171246660noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-10910587907136900362012-01-06T21:27:52.887-05:002012-01-06T21:27:52.887-05:00Again you perform a service for us all. Thanks a t...Again you perform a service for us all. Thanks a ton.Rusty Carlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09887821877521181811noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-280109180026706112012-01-06T17:18:38.688-05:002012-01-06T17:18:38.688-05:00Nice to see a query that worked. Now, if I could ...Nice to see a query that worked. Now, if I could only do that with my own :)<br /><br />.......dholedolorahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08715849844092553699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-21988894472962118402012-01-06T16:38:54.603-05:002012-01-06T16:38:54.603-05:00Excellent query, for all you both said, and especi...Excellent query, for all you both said, and especially the voice, like the bit with the knife and the use of the word "keel" for just the right detail.<br /><br />Will definitely check this one out, as it seems to combine my love of the East and nautical stories.<br /><br />And yeah, getting a stone that doesn’t tell the future would definitely be a less exciting opening. Charlie Brown: “I got a rock.”Steve MChttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15026970188928733645noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-58496735505629646132012-01-06T16:30:33.501-05:002012-01-06T16:30:33.501-05:00yeaaahh what a great thing you post,,always a grea...yeaaahh what a great thing you post,,always a great post =)followDamonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10855065954787383085noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-25197333217726896762012-01-06T16:16:00.252-05:002012-01-06T16:16:00.252-05:00Awesome query! I agree with Stina - the best line ...Awesome query! I agree with Stina - the best line is: Hagai tracks Sam down and demands the stone back--politely, of course, because Sam's got a knife. lolNicole Zoltackhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07464800543376449290noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-79619486149466286262012-01-06T15:08:09.841-05:002012-01-06T15:08:09.841-05:00BRILLIANT query! Thanks for sharing it, and yes, I...BRILLIANT query! Thanks for sharing it, and yes, I can't wait to read Adam's book!Elana Johnsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05877856005992028912noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-47576385108855091662012-01-06T15:08:00.727-05:002012-01-06T15:08:00.727-05:00That's a good query. I love reading these and ...That's a good query. I love reading these and seeing how successful authors achieved their dreams.Michael Offutt, Phantom Readerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10557969104886174930noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-54387610431417509202012-01-06T14:43:33.431-05:002012-01-06T14:43:33.431-05:00This is a great feature because it reiterates the ...This is a great feature because it reiterates the points I've heard over and over. Those are also the points we tend to forget once we get wrapped up in telling EVERY detail about a story when it's only supposed to tease. I liked seeing both his comments and yours.Brindahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09809660700359597836noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-24491902205570283372012-01-06T14:03:37.446-05:002012-01-06T14:03:37.446-05:00Terrific query, Adam. I'm sure it took a lot o...Terrific query, Adam. I'm sure it took a lot of time and hard work, but you made it sound effortless. You've boiled the novel down to the essential info and hooked us with voice and plot breadcrumbs that lead us to wanting more. Excellent! I can't wait to read it.Suzie F.https://www.blogger.com/profile/09560250678212373878noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-24902734124638470192012-01-06T13:47:57.864-05:002012-01-06T13:47:57.864-05:00This is great. Thank you for sharing this success...This is great. Thank you for sharing this successful query and the comments. Very helpful.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18226974782422398270noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-66860194269053564352012-01-06T13:44:11.996-05:002012-01-06T13:44:11.996-05:00Hooray for happy and inspiring things like this. C...Hooray for happy and inspiring things like this. Congratulations!Kristen Pelfreyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03446593300584488022noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-41641928691497328032012-01-06T13:30:51.229-05:002012-01-06T13:30:51.229-05:00This was extremely helpful. Getting a chance to s...This was extremely helpful. Getting a chance to see the breakdown of a successful query really helps to pinpoint ways of improving my own...which needs quite a bit of help to say the least.<br /><br />As for Naruto? What? That's the #1 Knucklehead Ninja!. Better believe it, love it. <br /><br />And TLA is the best series ever. Cartoon, yes, but just takes everything that makes a series lovable and ties it up in an artistically pleasing package. IMHO.Angela Brownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03324366495151363782noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-70017130240867454182012-01-06T13:14:01.382-05:002012-01-06T13:14:01.382-05:00for some reason, this makes me want to sit down wi...for some reason, this makes me want to sit down with my query and identify the exact reasons why I include every element and how I expect those elements to work in the query. or I guess I could try to send my query to you to critique here someday/when I'm not shy. <br /><br />I like this query, even though it seemed a little long to me. but I'm also particularly drawn to 1) steampunk and 2) adventure and 3) LEVIATHAN so I don't see any reason why I wouldn't be drawn to this. good thing I already follow Adam's blog so I can be on top of publication news...Jessica Silvahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15405267450788581689noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-13944804534987299532012-01-06T13:08:06.295-05:002012-01-06T13:08:06.295-05:00Adam introduced me to "The Last Airbender,&qu...Adam introduced me to "The Last Airbender," for which my children will always be grateful.<br /><br />It's a great query, and I love how both of your comments break it down. Very helpful. Thank you!Myrna Fosterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13534358757278599925noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-44468887810476608282012-01-06T12:36:44.360-05:002012-01-06T12:36:44.360-05:00I'm in awe. So much information in so few word...I'm in awe. So much information in so few words. Color coded explanations very helpful. I'm printing this one out as reference. Thanks Adam and Matt.farawayeyeshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17578277501054242356noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-58537627435246075652012-01-06T12:16:35.371-05:002012-01-06T12:16:35.371-05:00The different colors wasn't confusing at all. ...The different colors wasn't confusing at all. What a great query and I love how you both interjected your thoughts at different points.Pattihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00685341739870191402noreply@blogger.com