tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post4799565432265324579..comments2023-11-06T13:07:23.645-05:00Comments on The Quintessentially Questionable Query Experiment: Emily White's New QueryMatthew MacNishhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03264738483763244969noreply@blogger.comBlogger25125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-60571327737485706422010-09-12T19:41:18.119-04:002010-09-12T19:41:18.119-04:00Love the voice in this!! I think this is just the ...Love the voice in this!! I think this is just the kind of adventure that my students would gobble up! Good luck with it :)Jemi Fraserhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02214408467456320167noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-36176192548626522122010-09-10T13:58:47.215-04:002010-09-10T13:58:47.215-04:00Wow. Love the improvements you've made on the ...Wow. Love the improvements you've made on the query, Emily. I hope your dream agent loves it, too.Jaleh Dhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04942272578488986874noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-52157669276193239492010-09-09T20:14:21.576-04:002010-09-09T20:14:21.576-04:00Great job! "...and things that go boom."...Great job! "...and things that go boom." is absolutely fantastic!Anne Gallagherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05816355522284492131noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-81529586066615234402010-09-09T16:16:21.249-04:002010-09-09T16:16:21.249-04:00Since everyone is saying, much tighter, I'll g...Since everyone is saying, much tighter, I'll go with, way firmer. Good job, Emily!Jared Larsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02015044660613908060noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-80179841501240436482010-09-09T15:39:56.696-04:002010-09-09T15:39:56.696-04:00oh, I love when things get interstellar ;)oh, I love when things get interstellar ;)DEZMONDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14127166104359407763noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-51221718777668368092010-09-09T15:11:24.574-04:002010-09-09T15:11:24.574-04:00Looks lots better, Emily! Definitely the best of l...Looks lots better, Emily! Definitely the best of luck to you, though if what they say about needing only two of the three of luck, talent, and persistence, you may not actually need the luck.Jeff Beeslerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17935580053176710609noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-18397731872288889112010-09-09T14:38:04.996-04:002010-09-09T14:38:04.996-04:00Best of luck. This rocked!Best of luck. This rocked!VICTORIA SAAVEDRAhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10329745716789899212noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-71037120551314893832010-09-09T13:38:17.808-04:002010-09-09T13:38:17.808-04:00Wow, greatly improved!Wow, greatly improved!Nicole Zoltackhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07464800543376449290noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-36316271564897162512010-09-09T13:13:01.868-04:002010-09-09T13:13:01.868-04:00Oh wow, cool story! Great job, Emily! We're ro...Oh wow, cool story! Great job, Emily! We're rootin' for ya!Kathryn Rosehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05270893925385208665noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-53823419725834561802010-09-09T11:44:52.388-04:002010-09-09T11:44:52.388-04:00Brilliant. So much tighter than it was yesterday. ...Brilliant. So much tighter than it was yesterday. Awesome work. <br /><br />Good luck, Emily. :)Lindsayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04313619484424363895noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-9868594706285593262010-09-09T10:38:49.544-04:002010-09-09T10:38:49.544-04:00ooh so much tighter and therefore even more awesom...ooh so much tighter and therefore even more awesome than before!<br />Good job and good luck!Sarah Ahiershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02795455714801965956noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-50299209570120402402010-09-09T10:16:53.731-04:002010-09-09T10:16:53.731-04:00Wow, this is a great query. Much tighter. I'd ...Wow, this is a great query. Much tighter. I'd be requesting a full after reading it.<br /><br />Good luck, Emily!Stinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11415189347501942340noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-7409870224201795172010-09-09T09:46:11.264-04:002010-09-09T09:46:11.264-04:00supergreat! And sounds like a fun book! best of lu...supergreat! And sounds like a fun book! best of luck Emily~LTMhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05239077455322030275noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-86295079107446904762010-09-09T09:14:06.688-04:002010-09-09T09:14:06.688-04:00this is so much better! i can't imagine someo...this is so much better! i can't imagine someone reading this, and not wanting to hear the whole story! :)vic caswell https://www.blogger.com/profile/01218698236837610704noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-70036816366111478282010-09-09T09:02:45.000-04:002010-09-09T09:02:45.000-04:00I loved this too!! Well done Emily!!!
Good luck!
...I loved this too!! Well done Emily!!!<br /><br />Good luck!<br /><br />Take care<br />xOld Kittyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13185547869183611159noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-12467936556022921862010-09-09T08:52:02.940-04:002010-09-09T08:52:02.940-04:00I think this sounds great. The most important thin...I think this sounds great. The most important thing I saw in this query was a lot of voice. To me that says the writing probably has a lot of the same, and that's what makes a book fresh and interesting. Way to go!Melissa Gillhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02700191547004665402noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-81450918207851673672010-09-09T08:26:52.189-04:002010-09-09T08:26:52.189-04:00HUGE difference, what an improvement!
I want to r...HUGE difference, what an improvement!<br /><br />I want to read this, just based on the query. I love the end line about "things that go boom." Wonderful. I don't have anything else to offer to change. It's got all the things I would look for were I an agent.<br /><br />GREAT WORK!Stephanie Loréehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03512485557711771802noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-79171300830522187612010-09-09T08:17:41.499-04:002010-09-09T08:17:41.499-04:00Wow! What a difference. Excellent good job Emily!Wow! What a difference. Excellent good job Emily!Bish Denhamhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13359927719391990534noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-11550261804024338642010-09-09T07:58:01.767-04:002010-09-09T07:58:01.767-04:00A lot tighter. Just like my body (HAHAHAHAHA...).....A lot tighter. Just like my body (HAHAHAHAHA...)....oh...I made myself laugh. But no, seriously, it's much better. Great story to begin with but Timmy, err, uhh, Matt made it sing like a bird.Candylandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08956196611348299424noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-43877644962180744352010-09-09T07:43:56.050-04:002010-09-09T07:43:56.050-04:00oooh, genre-bend-a-riffic!oooh, genre-bend-a-riffic!Will Burkehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10158149526658590324noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-77725422602669978652010-09-09T07:27:15.804-04:002010-09-09T07:27:15.804-04:00Much more condensed.Much more condensed.Alex J. Cavanaughhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09770065693345181702noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-53131886403441681352010-09-09T07:15:25.607-04:002010-09-09T07:15:25.607-04:00I'm late to the party AGAIN (is there any Chex...I'm late to the party AGAIN (is there any Chex Mix left?), but this is a huge improvement. good job!Vicki Rochohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07381089434014961076noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-57192746923943991672010-09-09T07:13:34.410-04:002010-09-09T07:13:34.410-04:00MUCH better!!! Best of luck to you, Emily.MUCH better!!! Best of luck to you, Emily.K. M. Waltonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07167022736028223997noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-77573118208062409612010-09-09T07:05:27.343-04:002010-09-09T07:05:27.343-04:00hahaha That's brilliant!!! I got tingles! :o)hahaha That's brilliant!!! I got tingles! :o)Jessica Bellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10889900730906728317noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5345890055658252124.post-37152377253794493162010-09-09T07:00:46.144-04:002010-09-09T07:00:46.144-04:00Thanks, Matthew and everyone for all your great fe...Thanks, Matthew and everyone for all your great feedback! You guys are so amazing! :DEmily Whitehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06478461123707071108noreply@blogger.com